Freitag, 21. November 2008

Essay

City life or country life?

Not everyone is convinced about the beauty of city life or of country life. The beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Both got different pro and con circumstances, but which life is better?

In the first place city life used to be more exciting than the life in a country. There you can avail yourself of more sorts of activities. For instance going out with friends in different kind of clubs, theatres, cinemas, shopping centres, sport events… . That’s why the country life is better appropriate to families with babies and toddlers. Another pro argument of country life is that there hardly ever exists the noisiness of traffic, the pupils, who are loudly crying, laughing and walking through the streets and the lanes... .
In the second place one is more private on the city than on the country where a lot of people know you an watch what you are doing, what you are wearing, how you are living and so on…
Lastly, one has got a good chance to become a international famous and active person with a good job. It’s often a good condition to work in the city. You have more possibilities, more offers, a bigger choice and you don’t need an own car necessarily to get to your working place.
I think that on the one hand the city life brings a lot of experiences, dun, excitements, varieties and new friends. But on the other hand living in a country is very peaceful, recreative and you have the chance to feel and live in nature directly. For me living in a town is like living in an artificial world. I wish one should be able to combine both worlds.

To conclude J can’t say which way of life is the better one but if the population grows on like it has done the last ten- fifteen years the country life will automatically diminish and our society will have to be very creative to offer good living conditions for everyone. Good luck!

1 Kommentar:

Guenter hat gesagt…

expression: to be convinced of something; circumstances = Umstände; "used to be" = it was like this in the past, but it's no longer like this; "There you can avail yourself of more sorts of activities" C??; "That’s why the country life is better appropriate to families with babies and toddlers." C??; an argument for something; "Another pro argument of country life is that there hardly ever exists the noisiness of traffic, the pupils, who are loudly crying, laughing and walking through the streets and the lanes" C??; in the city / in the country; "in the second place" --> Secondly, ... / Another argument for ... is ...; "It’s often a good condition to work in the city." C??; "I think that on the one hand the city life brings a lot of experiences, dun, excitements, varieties and new friends." C?; " live in nature directly" C??,

grammar: different kinds of clubs; internationally famous; city life (no article!); "I wish one should be able to combine both worlds" --> I wish we could ..."

Your English is a strange mix of vocabulary that doesn't really fit together. Just picking difficult sounding words from a dictionary doesn't lead to good English. Unfortunately you frequently pick the wrong words or translate German sentences too literally. It's really difficult to understand what you want to say at times. You really should learn more vocabulary and use those words that you know how to use. If you use the dictionary, you'll only make more mistakes.

Essay / composition structure: You start the paragraph with city life and then suddenly change to country life. And then the essay gets very confusing. So your structure is quite insufficient.