Raphaela
Wegeler 5
A-6840 Götzis
Dezember 4nd, 2008
BBC ComplaintsWegeler 5
A-6840 Götzis
Dezember 4nd, 2008
PO Box 1922
Glasgow
G2 3WT
Dear Madam/Sir
Letter of complaint
I want to complaint about how women are presented in advertising. Something must be done about this! It can’t be that women are pressed into a cliché that had existed in the past. Watching not much TV I have a feeling that women are sex symbols and the only thing for what they are competent is housework. They have to present the product very attractive and that demands from them to be beautiful, sexy and silly, because an intelligent and competitive woman is a high challenge. Now the image of beautiful women should change and not being presented like a beautiful object. For instance in a washing powder advertising, where always a woman says how good it is and how clean the clothes will be. As a matter of fact nearby all advertisings with household appliances show a woman.
In summing up it can be said that I would be glad if you start to change the image of women. We should be ahead of our time.
Yours,
Raphaela
Dear Madam/Sir
Letter of complaint
I want to complaint about how women are presented in advertising. Something must be done about this! It can’t be that women are pressed into a cliché that had existed in the past. Watching not much TV I have a feeling that women are sex symbols and the only thing for what they are competent is housework. They have to present the product very attractive and that demands from them to be beautiful, sexy and silly, because an intelligent and competitive woman is a high challenge. Now the image of beautiful women should change and not being presented like a beautiful object. For instance in a washing powder advertising, where always a woman says how good it is and how clean the clothes will be. As a matter of fact nearby all advertisings with household appliances show a woman.
In summing up it can be said that I would be glad if you start to change the image of women. We should be ahead of our time.
Yours,
Raphaela
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Instead of 'letter of complaint" you could also be more specific: 'Complaint about the presentation of women in commercials'.
You should write a clear introduction. Here you would refer to something on TV that made you write this letter. And then - afterwards - you go into detail and you argue in favour of your position.
Werbung im Fernsehen: commercial
to complain - a complaint
tense: had existed in the past?
exp/str: "Watching not much TV I have a feeling that women are sex symbols and the only thing for what they are competent is housework." - Although I watch TV rarely, I get the feeling that in most programmes women are presented ... and it is suggested that ...
adverb: to present attractively
exp: "that demands from them to be beautiful"
exp: "beautiful, sexy and silly" - 'silly' doesn't fit here
exp: "a high challenge" ?
exp: "Now the image of beautiful women should change and not being presented like a beautiful object." ??
str: "For instance in a washing powder advertising, where always a woman says how good it is and how clean the clothes will be." --> incomplete sentence
exp: nearby / nearly
exp: 'in summing up" --> to sum up / in short
I'd be glad .., if you started ...
Yours, ...---> That's a bit more colloquial than "Yours sincerely," .
You write in a very abstract way and then you run into vocabulary problems. A dictionary is NOT helpful here. I've already said so several times. It would be better if you wrote about more concrete situations like describing one or two commercials you don't like and then presenting your argument.
The letter layout is correct.
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